Could this be?

[Tacz]

I drew something! Isnt that the first sign of the apocalypse? (Please keep in mind that this is my first real attempt at manga/anime styled characters, and is a bit sloppy, but the paper version is looking better and better, and Ill update as often as I can)

EDIT: File Working Now

[Riviques]

doomed O.O we're all doomed **sees the ground morph into armegeadon** yep, the ol' apocay is workin itself up. look out for the horesmen there, tacz **pushes his head down as a flying horse zings by nearly missing him**

[Tacz]

Im still working on the picture, itll look alot better in a little while.

*narrowly dodges a few slashes from one of the horsemens blades*

[Firia]

Right on man! Mind if I sling a few tips your way that may help you out? ^_^

So ok, I busted out the ol' MS paint program cause I'm cool. ^_^
here's the color code;
RED lines = the suggested change
blue lines = the suggested removal
Green lines = the suggested movement of a something.

These are just suggestions for improvment. ^_^ I often wished someone woulda helped me a bit back when.

The left breast looks good. the right breast appears like it could be shooting outwards from within the chest with no gravity weighing it down. ^_^ Breasts, even the firm ones, give way to gravity (I've wondered what breasts would be like in Zero-G. ). If you adjust the breast folds in the clothes, I think you'll change how the breast in question appears, esspecially in perspective. ^_^

Of course, getting rid of the origional breast line is something I suggest too (as long as we're keeping with typical manga styles).

I COULD be nit picking a bit here. ^_^ Sorry, I've got an eye for detail I guess. I can't tell if it's just a digital blemish, but it looks like it could be a belly button? I'm gonna roll with it and say maybe it is. ^_^ if it is, I think it needs to move over above the zipper area of the shorts. Right now, ir rests on the right hip. ^_^ If you turn your hip and look at your belly button location, you'll find that it just kinda adjusts a bit, but pretty much stays there.

So yeah, just move it and all will be well. ^_^
Unless it's just a blemish, then ignore me.

[Tacz]

Thanks much, Firia! Were going out to staples later, so I can get a correction pen and a new cartridge for my Tachikawa.

Oh, yea, that black dot is not her belly button but something my scanner picked up. *scratches head*

About the breasts, I was... eh... confused...? So thats why they dont look right. Ill do what you said.

[Boinky]

OK I'm far from an artist, so take my few comments with lots of salt as opposed to Fir's more educated directions.

- I think the belly button wouldn't be a bad addition (possibly your scanner's a closet artist?)

- Didn't really look at it that closely originally, but after Fir's comments it seem the body is twisting almost an inhuman amount at the waist just judging by looking at the line of buttons on the shirt to the pocket position on the shorts

That's it. And certainly doesn't look bad in any way (and far far better than anything I could hope to draw)

[Darth Bootay]

For a first attempt, it's not too shabby. Definately worth continuing to refine.

Adjusting the shirtfront and moving the arm just a little closer into the body (the entire arm, including the shoulder) and then adjusting the breasts so they are slightly more of a sideview should place your anime beauty at a more humanly achievable position.

Once you've got her in a pose you're satisfied with, ink her lines cleanly. Manga-style drawing is distinctive in its hallmark Big-Eyes-Little (or giant)-Mouth style and the beautiful cleanness of its lines.

[Boinky]

Also as Strong-Bad has taught us - "Ya gotta have blue hair!"

[Tacz]

New version:

Through a reprint needed for a big change, it became a fair amount darker.

[Tacz]

AHH!

I just now notice that the arm is completely messed up...

Uhh...

Ill fix that later. Ive spent way too much time and way too much white-out for today.

[Tacz]

Got bored, so I drew this one:

[Firia]

Excellent!
(here's a line that's just to good out of context. )
Your breasts look MUCH better now. ^_^

[Boinky]

Tacz's breasts look excellent (It hurts just to type)

[Darth Bootay]

*gigglesnort!*

OMGz...

Tacz's breasts...

*falls over twitching*

[Tacz]

Yea, they are perfect and... oh, wait, are you talking about the drawing?

[Oddysee]

*BUMP!*

This thread has been bumbed by the ACCOMWTPMD (Association Currently Consisting Of Me Wanting To Promorte More Drawing) or PMD (Promote more drawing) for short.

The goal of this bump is to make said artist take up drawing again, and show us more work. Failure to do so will result in lots of angry finger shaking!





Viva la PMD! Tm

[Tacz]

As soon as my scanner is fixed, you shall see some more of my sctibblings.